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The Big Before

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The curtains don’t open
anymore, and he is growing
staler with the air
and the bread in his fridge
is a lost cause.

He is a lost cause,
he tells himself
at night, when the shakes
come, and go, and
come again, and sharp
edges form upon his shape-
lessness.

(I’ve seen him
before, from afar
and up close,
and I know him
well.)





He thinks
a tragedy might sort him out,
or maybe a haircut, but
bad things don’t happen
to people like him, they say,
and he knows the sun
will never kiss the back
of his neck.
My first poem of 2016!  This is basically just me making myself write so that I don't enter into another months-long dry spell.  I experimented with some things here, and I think they mostly turned out pretty decent.  It feels a little different writing free verse again, since the last time I did that was nearly a year ago, and I feel a little rusty.  This was still fun to write though, in its way, and I hope it was okay to read too!

As always, comments are welcome and appreciated.
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MazWeaver's avatar
This is a terrific read. Love the use of white space, and the idea of the narrator growing 'staler with the air'. 

Must admit, I can't quite reconcile the title with the body of the poem (which might well be entirely my problem), but I do love the language, so plain and so evocative at the same time.


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