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May 15

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On the spider's web,
dewdrops hang, shining
in the morning light.
This is my entry for ~akarra's Nature Haiku contest (check it out here: [link]). I had to write several before I came to this one, but I really like it so here it is.

Comments are welcome and appreciated!
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ErinM31's avatar
:wave: Greetings from a fellow participant in #FeedbackFrenzy!

This is a lovely haiku! :clap: It is simple and elegant as I believe such poems should be. :) I like that you went with five syllables per line; it gives it a nice harmony.

As written, it paints a nice image in the reader's mind. It could be even better, if you use words or an image in an unexpected way. That would make the image uniquely yours and even more memorable.

Once again, lovely work! :heart: